Eyes Wide Shut

I was once a very uncomplicated guy. A cup of coffee in the morning, solving murder cases by day, and in bed by eight. That was my routine, day in, day out.

But the Eye Killer, as he has come to be known as, changed everything.

I’ve become more restless. More observant. More wary. More anxious. Or so I thought.

His murder count climbed steadily: one victim became 2, two became 4. I was at my wit’s end. Yet the Senior Officers insisted I continued working on it, as if my mental state simply didn’t matter. They called it justice, I called it a waste of my talent and sanity.

True justice no longer existed in this world. It had been crushed under the weight of bribery and corruption. The innocent rotted in jail while the guilty roamed free. This was what they called Justice.

I exhaled, forcing my anger down where it belonged and left. I got home, tired already, grabbed a cup of hot coffee with trembling fingers and collapsed on the sofa. I gazed outside the window of my study, watching ordinary people navigate ordinary lives while the sun bled across the horizon, marking another day’s end.  My gaze drifted to the board, pinpointing a string of photos, of victims, of suspects and notes that shared my perspective. Connections that only I could see.

I took another sip of my now lukewarm coffee. I’d frustratingly made little to no progress, usually I wouldn’t have taken so much time.

Sleep was a luxury I couldn’t afford. Another long night awaited, not that anyone cared for my well-being anymore. Perhaps, my exhausted mind would reveal something I have missed, bring some clarity to this mess.

 I tried hard to stay awake, feeding lies to myself, dreaming of bringing an end to this ordeal. But my eyelids dropped about an hour later and I surrendered to sleep.

I woke up as sunlight filtered through the bedroom curtains. I had failed again.

The phone rang and with it came the news of fresh carnage. Four more bodies. Three men, one woman, all ex-offenders.

The killer’s signature remained unchanged.

Eyes methodically plucked out.

Lungs punctured with surgical precision.

Hair ripped out in violent clumps

Then the realisation hit me like cold water. I wasn’t on the sofa where I had collapsed last night. Somehow, I was in my bedroom.  The coffee cup washed, the case board undisturbed. But I had no memory of moving.

How had I gotten here?

To be continued….

Meet Rinzen Kaul, a spirited 12-year-old with boundless imagination and a heart full of dreams. A proud Kashmiri, she treasures her roots and never says no to a plate of delicious yakhni, especially when shared with her closest friends. When she’s not devouring Japanese comics or binge watching her favourite anime, you’ll find her daydreaming about epic adventures or sketching her own Manga characters. Manga isn’t just a hobby for her, it’s a passion bordering on obsession! Ambitious and determined, Rinzen hopes to one day become a doctor, serving in the armed forces and making a real difference in the world. Until then, she’s busy collecting stories, making memories and proving that you’re never too young to chase your dreams.

6 Comments

  • Sheetal Raina

    Powerful opening Rinzen. Keep at it. I can’t wait to read what comes next.

  • Minesh Khashu

    Rinzen

    I am not sure whether your name is based on Tibetian or Japanese roots. Either way, it has a powerful meaning and your words and imagination signify the same. Hopefully we will chat someday about creative writing. Do you write poetry as well?

    “Words are like babies we give birth to, which travel far and wide, to distant minds, to live a life of their own”

    Stay blessed.

    Minesh

  • Sudha Koul

    Rinzen, this is such a powerful piece! You’ve created a perfect blend of mystery and emotion. Keep writing — your imagination and storytelling skills are incredible for your age!

  • Kamlesh Kumar

    Great suspense! 🎭
    I was about to catch a mistake, but you cleverly wrapped it up in the last line — well done! The world needs more writers like you, especially at just 12 years old — impressive! 👏

    Is “To Be Continued” your way of pulling an Ekta Kapoor move? 😄 Reminds me of “Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi” and “Kahani Ghar Ghar Ki” — never-ending dramas!

    Your story had that Gupt-style twist that kept readers on their toes till the end… and then — To Be Continued! 😅

    My comments will also be… To Be Continued… ✍️

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